Secrets (Why?)
I have things to tell you
but I'd rather tell you here
the reason I don't tell you face to face
because of fear
When you look at me
I feel tons of insecurities
When you hold my hand
I don't think of you as my man
When you give me a compliment
I feel you are judging me like Parliament
When you tell me you love me
It feels like you're hovering me
See the reasons I cannot tell you?
For fear that you have secrets too
I Saw
As we walked down the river
We saw the snakes slither
I saw a monarch butterfly
It flew through the sun filled sky
He saw a crow in a tree
I told him to let it be
I saw a blue fish
He told me to make a wish
He saw a unicorn
Its glowing rainbow horn
I saw a shining star
I could see it very far
He saw a full moon
It was time to go soon
He said, "I saw an angel"
I gasped! "Who was it?
He replied, "You"
4 comments:
Thanks, Patricia. You're welcome to post the story too, if it's not too long. Just let us know which texts you want us to focus on for the 17th.
Hi Professor, I guess the short story and these two poems. I promise to have the story up by tomorrow night, Thursday the latest. I promise it'll be short. Thanks again!
I really enjoyed reading the poem "I saw". The ending just really got to me. What i liked was the heavy description of the scenery. It seemed magical-sort of unreal. The scenery really fit the ending where he replied it was you. It kind of also seemed magical. But i think that the last answer the boy gave (you) is too direct. I think that you should have ended it with him hesitating a little bit like: it was..it was you. Otherwise the poems sounds really great.
Secrest (Why?)- I liked the way you ended the poem by bringing it back to the idea in the begining.
I think that this poem works well because it has a good flow to it. I liked how you asked the question in teh end because it really gives the reader something to think about.
I Saw- I really like the imagery of this poem. It really captures the feel of a dream something almost magical. Also, I like that it rhymes.
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