As the furious sky, set ablaze,
Voices fills into large rooms,
Sitting and listening attentively.
Waiting patiently for time to fly by.
The short boy asking questions, while
the visible hallways are filled by people,
Diverging in every directions....
Thinking of devouring hot fresh food,
Makes my stomach growls so loud.
Looking down at my oval shaped, gold toned watch,
I realised time has started to take it toll on my body......
As my body is refuled once again........ the sun returns to slumber.
Wednesday, November 5, 2008
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hi... your piece is interesting, but maybe you might want to add a last sentence to the first stanza as an introduction to the other basically to tie the two stanzas together... express how time is taking a toll on your body (thats an interesting concept); Also you might want to elaborate a little on the stanzas for some substance.
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