Always Praying for a resolution
Always Aiming for forever
Always Trying to succeed
Always Requiring love
Always Insisting on happiness
Always Crying for opportunities
Always Intertwined within herself
Always Accepting what cannot be changed
Sometimes Lies to herself
Sometimes Undermindes others
Sometimes Prefers solitude
Sometimes Enjoys everything
Never Wasting a moment
Never Understanding her life
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Hi Patricia.... your piece seems interesting and calls upon the reader to use their analytic skills which is great. However, you're piece seem to be a bit contradictory. What exactly is your aim? I think if you added a solution or concluded to something at the end it would make your piece much stronger and more complete.
Jody-Ann
This piece concentrates on the same theme of the words 'never' and 'always' that Angie wrote about, however you took a different method. I like how you talk about the word "always". Although the word "always" is a definitive word, you phrase some of the sentences with ambiguity. For example rather than say "Always succeeding", you say " Always trying to succeed", and "always requiring love" rather than "always in love" or "having love".
After reading it a couple of times I realized that your name is spelled out in the first letters after the words 'always', 'sometimes', and 'never'. Good job Patricia Lupe Wu!
Hey Patricia,
I love this piece you wrote, I felt like I could connect to it a lot. But I thought maybe instead of writing "herself" you could use another word to reach out to a wider audience instead of just women. I loved reading this because it made me think of my own life. Good job!
wow...that is pretty cool what you did with limiting yourself to create your name in the first stanza. I didnt even realize when i was reading it but when i looked at it i realized that those letters of your name just jump out on you. Im wondering is Lupe your middle name? I really like how you played around with these words and created something so deep.
Patricia
I don't know if this was your aim but it seems like you put the words "always" "sometimes" and "never"in front of a bunch of fragments. You could easily put "never" where you wrote "always" or even "sometimes" before "never". I don't see how any of them are different.
Is your intent that "always" "sometimes" & "never" are all the same?
This piece really seems like it reflects on the angst that every teenager suffers. Life itself is contradictory, and I remember feeling these things when I was growing up and going through high school.
What was your inspiration behind this? Was it a person, or was it yourself? I would really like it if you developed your story a little more.
I was going to suggest putting the line 'Always Intertwined within herself' in the beginning, to jump start the rest of the poem playing off personal contradictions. But when I read the other posts I realized that the purpose of the format is to spell out your name!
You mention such thoughtful subjects though, I think you can still elaborate without taking away from the name experiment.
I like the name down the middle. as i was reading i kept wondering why every second word in each sentence was capitalized. then i realized. good job.
Very interesting, Patricia. This is a great poem for discussion, because it operates on the level of a constraint-based exercise (since your name is spelled out by the first letters of the second word in each line), and on the level of emotion (since the self-image you generate is both contradictory and angst-ridden). The different ways of approaching the poem can be seen in the range of responses above. Here's a question for everyone, inspired by Angie's comment: how universal do you think this poem is? Is it really about Patricia, or do the attitudes described apply to the reader as well?
Very Creative in spelling out your name. I like how you chose the second word instead of the first word.Using the first word would have been more ordinary and predictable. I also like your middle name.
I like how you used your name in this poem, I think the idea is very different. Although some of the lines are contradictory it seems to work, I think that everyone feels differently sometimes.
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