Sunday, October 5, 2008

The Last Moment

Defenseless and powerless,
I was lost in a trance
My body shuddered with pain
As It penetrated into my system
Each tiny hair shivered in its response
As time ceased to exist,
Reality slowly ebbed away
Into an unknown world
Where I was left in a blind utterance
With my eyes shut,
I welcomed in the pain as well as the pleasure
I was no longer shocked,
Nor bemused.
I had accepted my fate
The truths behind my experience
Unraveled in this very darkness
It happened.
There was no turning back,
Nowhere to go.
As I slowly opened my eyes
A spur of light overwhelmed the darkness
painted in my head
His smile fumed with no conscience
His deceiving eyes
Glistened with rage.
They drifted in unison with mine
To the spot
I had saw
Witnessed it red handedly
The thick red blood
The stains on my flesh
Pain no longer was the effect of my troubles
For by body felt numb
It was the unbearable heat
And then the sudden rush of chills
That captivated my body
As he deepened it in even more
My screams traveled with no ones’ remorse
For No one was present
No witnesses at the scene
His task was completed
He accomplished his goals
As he backed away,
He dropped the bloody knife to the floor
Satisfaction of death
Aroused his smile ever so wide
Droop after droop,
My eyes witnessed no more,
For death captured my body
And rid of my soul.

2 comments:

Trishy said...

Wow, what a powerful piece. To be honest, at the beginning, I thought this piece was about a rape. You use words like "penetrate, pain and pleasure, aroused smile". This story is told from the past perspective, so it seems like the person is recounting something that occured.The part that stood out was the part about pleasure. Why was it a pleasure to be murdered? Was it because the pain would end? It's such an intriguing word to use and I think if you developed that idea it would make this piece even more poignant than it is. Great work!

nadia said...

In the beginning i tried to make it a little bit arbitrary. I used the word pleasure because i kept saying that i no longer felt the pain. So it was the pleasure of not feeling the pain. This word also fit into the image i was trying to create to the reader of ambiguality. Thanks for the feedback.