Saturday, October 4, 2008

OMG by Joanne for Workshop Oct. 6

yo

whatup

where u @

aint goin 2 class

y?

im chillin wit j

j? wtf I herd he was fuckin wit sum nex bitch

dat skank bitch jus sain dat cuz he fucked that sloppy ass 1x. not ma fault peopleb catchin feelins

nah yo I seen dem last night @ da spot

dat fuckin hoe waz just probly suckin dick in da back cuz dats all dat bitch is good 4. Bitch do 2 everybody. N e wayz what was u doin @ da spot?

lmfao don’t flip shit we talking about u greezin up dat pussy 4 j

i aint flipin shit u wanna talk les talk

well I went 4 a show das it

i know u aint still fuckim wit o’boy

he mad cool

u said muthafucka was a 3 stroke creep

we do otha stuff

nah yo das a waist of a good dick if ya ask me. I like a dude dat put his back in the shit fuck all that otha bull shit

OMG Lmfao ur wild. The otha shit is good shit nothing like some great head to get u thru da day fuck starbucks

lol I herd dat toss dat shit like a salad

i lettem know only way u seen me is if u eatin me

lmao U talk about me bitch.

im bout to go class is ova

adam don’t forget 2 sign da attendance sheet 4 me

I got u steve.

3 comments:

Trishy said...

This is a piece that I think could be a scene in any young man's life currently. I think you have a lot to work with, but the writing style takes away from the strength of the piece. I guess you wanted tihs to have an authentic fell, but your ideas tend to become second to the style and it becomes distracting. I think this would make a great short story, because I'd love to know more about the characters and what occurs.

Tyrike said...
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Justine said...

I think that the idea that this piece is written in text messages is very creative. It uses lots of modern language and really captures the essence of two people texting each other having a conversation, in other words,it doesn't seem forced.